Using language features in our writing...

Last week we started looking at some language features. Language features add impact to our writing because they help the reader picture what we are writing about, add humour or description to our ideas.

The language features we looked at were personification and alliteration.

For this task we had to include personification and alliteration in our writing. We had to write a paragraph about this picture and make sure it was interesting for the reader.

I wandered through the black tree silhouettes. The wind whispered at me, convincing me to go on. I followed the path until I saw light. As I approached it, it got brighter and brighter. I saw a shadow slowly slithering near me. I ran away. The black tree cut outs threatening me to stay. Faster and faster I ran until I could see the lovely long lights they immediately tell me I’m safe and sound back home.  

By Courtney

The wild wind whistled and sent chills down my back. The lightes flickered and blinked at me. I tried to stay still on the rough branch but the wind was screeching so loud and swaying so fierce that the tree swayed and swooped, so low that my feet were only like 15 centimeters off the ground. I bet you’re wondering why I am sitting on a branch staring at a house. Well it was a dare...

By Zoe G

The haunted house was a very spooky place. The moon glared at the house, giving it an eerie glow. The door screamed as you opened it. The windows were shattered like broken bones. The basement was haunted with villainous vampires, scary and super spooky skeletons, mega mutant mice and worrying wolves. The beds were bleeding and the curtains were ripped. The food was horridly horrifying. The tables were jagged and the trees in the courtyard were shaking, as if they were waving. Rounding up all the information, the horrid, horrifying haunted house was the worst place ever.

By Lucas

We also had to use these language features in a piece of writing about Waterwise to help us understand that we can use them in different types of writing and they still create impact.

The first time at waterwise we got to enter the amazing sailing boats.

While we were mounted inside them the sail waved and went rogue, It sounded like whistling air. The wild wavey waves were pushing us towards the shore as we almost flipped over the boat, After the fifteen fast minutes we finally arrived back to the shiny shore.

By Logan

I turned the boat around.

The tiller wasn’t helping the winds strong hand pulling my boat along.

I wanted to swap jobs. The wind was still pulling our boat backwards.I held the boom back but it disagreed with me and lunged at my head.The roaring rapids rolled across our boat.

I felt the wind calm down and I looked across at Andrew's awesome boat.

By Johnny